Friday, 4 October 2013

Essay

Relationships. Everybody has a different opinion on relationships, there's healthy and unhealthy. In the poem "how is your heart" by Charles Bukowski he talks about the unhealthy kind ,and how your life at home is bad, you feel ugly and unwanted wherever you are. I can't say that I can relate to him, but I'm sure some of you can. Unentilted by Jenifer L'Hirondelle,I feel this poem is sharing her love towards her son ,I also can't relate to this because I don't have a child. The poem that spoke to me the most was “To a stranger" by Walt Whitman. When I read this poem I thought of a girlfriend/boyfriend relationship and how they were together for a long period of time, they mean everything to each other, there in love everything goes well, then out of nowhere they brake up and there strangers..? Yes, this probably happened to a few of you but I can talk about this through experience. You guys spend as much time as you can together text/call all the time have your inside jokes, you think everything is going perfectly then the day you never want to happen, happened. You guys are strangers now. No more goodnight calls, kissing, morning texts that say "morning beautiful<3" no passing each other in the halls on your way to class saying hey, or your having a bad day and just seeing them smile or knowing you have them turns your whole day around. You guys avoid each other. One talks behind your back, you don't even look at each other anymore, no texts/calls absolutely nothing. You guys are strangers. You feel like you’re nothing to him, like none of the time being together meant something. Were strangers now? Looking at that person all the memories come rushing back, and you think to yourself I have surely somewhere lived a life of joy with you.

8 comments:

  1. I love how your connection is really personal but i think to make this better you should read some other blogs and connect to that so you can write something about each poem.

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  2. I love your essay but i wished you explained more and i like how you've connected a poem to your personal life and there are a few grammar mistakes but overall i loved it..

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  3. I agree with Jayde and Pakriti, maybe add some paragraphs and explain a bit more of each poem.

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  4. Such a good connection to a powerful emotion for you. Thanks for sharing that. Your feelings and ideas will be even more accessible to readers as you learn to structure and formalize your ideas. Pay attention to others efforts at using paragraphs to separate idea, and using more formal language to eliminate the "you" and "me" sections. :) Not bad for a one day effort on phone?

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  5. Really good detail of how you connect i think it would have been better if you tried to connect to the other storys

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  6. Good job on your essay, I liked how you talked about your relations to each poem, maybe you should break your essay into paragraphs:)

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  7. its good, just a lot of puncuation errors :)

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  8. Is there a way you can relate to Unentitled?

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